Poem #214

How can you make someone feel invisible,
thinner than paper, lighter than feather?
All of that flesh and blood and you just make it
disappear, you strip them away from everything.

How do you make someone feel worthless?
Just stay on the sidelines, don’t take away their essence.
If you drain their life to elevate yourself up it
will just intoxicate you more, stop spreading the damage.

9 replies on “Poem #214”

Not sure if I understand. I found the first five lines exceptionally crafted with good flow, but then you lost me. “Elevate,” and “up” seems repetitive. Also “it” appears at the end of the line when it’s the start of a new idea. All and all you’re very talented and it shows in the first five lines.

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